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  1. Hey Ryan,

    I think that you did a good job with your first story about Bhima the Great. I like the way that you were able to tell the story from the perspective that is a little bit different from the original story. I think that the story is well constructed, but that it would be even better if you could add some conversation throughout the story. It is difficult to see thing from some character perspective without conversation. I saw somewhere along the story that you said "swayamvara". I am not sure what that mean and some definition to that would be good as well. Also I wonder what Ghatotkacha felt like when Arjuna won the competition and took Draupadi from the king. Was he angry? I am sure he must have some pride and for him to lose to a peasant. It must be difficult to face that?

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  2. Hi Ryan!
    I really like the title of your project, that's so fun! I think you could add a bit more information on your homepage. You could add a little table of contents or something if you wanted to. So far, your project is coming together well! I like how you kept the same theme with your project, but are just slightly changing the stories to make them your own. I especially like with your first story how just changed it a little bit to make it easier to follow and simpler to understand. I know I definitely had a hard time reading some of the original versions, so it is nice to see it broken down. You could definitely work on adding dialogue to add another layer!

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  3. Hi Ryan! I really liked the layout of your website. I found it to be cute and very easy to navigate! One thing I really liked how informative your author's notes were. It's important to sometimes keep those lengthier because we are all reading different versions of the Indian epics and a good detailed author's note may help someone who read a different version. It could also be a great refresher to someone who did read the same version. Overall, though your story was very interesting and kept me wanting to read more which is always a plus! Also, I am a big sucker for romance and I personally loved reading about Rama and Sita and the Ramayana as a whole, so your storybook was definitely something I was interested in! Keep up the good work and I am excited to see what more you come up with in the future!

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  4. Hey there Ryan! I think you have such a fun title for your project! At first I was a little confused but then it clicked in my head and think that it is so creative!I found your version of the story really easy to follow and with a clear author's note. I think a big thing would be if you wanted to add more words and overall meat to your story I would suggest adding in some dialogue. However if you are just wanting to keep it pretty simple I would stick with the version you have now. Overall Ryan I would say very well done on your project and layout. You did well adding images and clearly demonstrating who the next story was going to be about. It was very easy to navigate which I always find helpful and appealing! I look forward to reading more from you. Hope you have a great rest of your semester!

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